the jumps themselves looked good, but the runups were slow, the landings were mushy and loud.
when you're not going max effort, work on nice smooth accelerative runups for both DLRVJ AND SLRVJ, 3-4 increasingly powerful steps, very fluid.. work on landing better too, control the landings more, it's a good way to get in some force absorption work.. think about landing soft/quiet as you're coming down, no need to stick the landings like a depth drop, but just try and land softr/more quiet.
impressed with GHR/hang snatch.. for GHR, sacrifice depth a little bit by trying to stay a bit straight, make sure you squeeze the glutes AND contract the low abs so that you're in a nice neutral position as you go down and up.. if you need to cut depth a bit to stay straight, do it.. see how it feels, it should be alot harder and much more hamstring.
i'm not an oly coach so i'll let whoever is critiquing your oly's do that (lance?).. but the hang snatch actually looked pretty good I was surprised, i thought I was about to see some spaz shit and bam, first & third reps looked really good, good stuff.. ;d
as for shooting,
DID U PURPOSEFULLY SHOOT THIS VIDEO IN THE DARK TO PISS ME OFF?loljk
but ya i can't see what i need to see other than the follow through and a few instances of good form, follow through looks good on most shots, there was one at 40s or something i remember, where you didn't hold your follow through, and you missed.. other than that, every follow through looked pretty good, not too far forward, nice wrist flick.. just can't see the feet too good etc and how everything is lining up.
but congrats, you look athletic
pc